Trannsexual film script

[bluesoul]

I've actually read quite a bit of books on screenwriting, as well as two years of film school at UT austin, and hundreds of hours of youtube videos about both writing and filmmaking in general.

Also, none of you have actually read the script yet, you are all basing your comments on an extended summary, which leaves out many details of the story. I would prefer it if you guys actually gave it a shot and read it before you start telling me how it won't work or how I should post in on fictionmania or whatever. And there isn't a porn element in this story either, it's a superhero tale. And yes, the forced sex change is original because it has been rarely used in cinema and never used in superhero narratives. And the film is about transsexuals, the main character is a transsexual

so why didn't you just post the screenplay instead of refuting any criticism because we didn't have all the details? were you looking to hear something specific?

and if you've studied film and watched hours of videos online, how come the way you wrote your synopsis showed no evidence of this?

[bassman2546]

First: I didn't see any logline that grabbed my attention to read a properly written synopsis.

Second: I didn't see any properly written synopsis that made me want to read the script. If these two items aren't perfectly written you won't get ANYONE to read the script. They won't waste their time. Based on the feedback here, that will be a given with film industry professionals. This is a good thing because now you can fix all this before approaching any industry professional. And rule you probably know. No one will read unsolicited movie scripts. They will however read a logline and, if intrigued, will either ask for a 'one page' (synopsis) or the script itself.

Third: This script heads down the road of shock value, based on what I've read, and no reputable film company (and non-reputable for that matter) will touch it. They have a reputation to uphold. Your audience is small. Film companies want a script that will target a large audience.

Fourth: You've received some good information on here regarding the transgender community. I suggest you embrace it and do more research to tweak your script.

[GroobyKrissy]

I've actually read quite a bit of books on screenwriting, as well as two years of film school at UT austin, and hundreds of hours of youtube videos about both writing and filmmaking in general.

Also, none of you have actually read the script yet, you are all basing your comments on an extended summary, which leaves out many details of the story. I would prefer it if you guys actually gave it a shot and read it before you start telling me how it won't work or how I should post in on fictionmania or whatever. And there isn't a porn element in this story either, it's a superhero tale. And yes, the forced sex change is original because it has been rarely used in cinema and never used in superhero narratives. And the film is about transsexuals, the main character is a transsexual

Here is the problem... the film / dialogue as you have revealed it thus far is incorrect in the very basics of addressing the term, "Transsexual". That is my only problem. The rest is fiction and honestly... there is a wide degree of, and room for, artistic license in fiction.

I would have a problem introducing a superhero as "Transsexual" who has basically had it thrust upon him / her (by way of body modification) (and no pun intended). I think the vast majority of those who identify as TS would disagree with the very premise that you "become" Transsexual... for whatever reason. Your image propagates a myth that any person who is tired of their gender and wants to try something new (or has it forced upon them) falls into the "Transsexual" category, which is offensive, and simply not true.

If you think people are being harsh here, just wait until you actually have a more critical body of people (read: grumpy, old, academic Transsexuals) studying the final release. As it is, YOU asked for feedback (which includes criticism - constructive or otherwise), so I find it a bit surprising that your only response thus far has been basically to say, "Well, you all just don't understand what I'm trying to do here."

I think most everyone who has commented understands the premise but what you have demonstrated thus far, at least to me, is that you have not thought out your entire storyline adequately and / or researched your source material (premise) as thoroughly as you should have before asking for feedback.

Believe me, I'm not being harsh... but if someone asks for feedback, I take that as an honest request, expecting the good and the bad. I applaud you for wanting to create a Transsexual superhero... as it stands though, the community is ridiculed enough without yet one more incorrect stereotype trying to represent it. I am generally very supportive of artistic endeavors of any sort that involve the community but this has the markings of mockery; however it was intended originally.

[Prospero]

I WILL be harsh. if what you offered up so far arrived on my desk, I wouldn't read it beyond the first line or two. And I've been producing films for 25 years. Krissy is spot on with her remarks as are many others here. Back to the drawing board.

[BellaBellucci]

~BB~

[Stavros]

Bella, honey, I don't think had in mind a Flintstones version of transexual superhero(ine)
...but who knows? How many serious life-changing dramas entered the Hollywood machine and came out as a comedy vehicle for Vince Vaughn and Jennifer Aniston? Did anyone see The Player?